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Re: KLBC Help with phrasing

From: "Steven Boozer" <>
>    pImlaw' romuluSngan be' porgh.
>    I've heard Romulan women are different. (MO ST5 notes)
>    ("The Romulan woman's body is apparently different.")

This could also be interpreted as "Romulan women's bodies are apparently
different."  A general statement instead of one referring specifically to
the Romulan ambassador.

> Now a stylistic suggestion:  As it is, this sentence has three {-lu'}'s
> one {-bogh}, all of which can confuse the reader.  Think about getting rid
> of one of the passives.  Contemporary English uses the passive a lot, but
> my feeling is that Klingon style prefers the active voice.  Instead of
> saying "the body was buried", say "they buried the body":
>    DaHjaj lom lumol.
>    Today they buried the body (corpse).

Who are they?  I wasn't following the original context.  If the "they" is
known, then certainly do this.  But don't remove /-lu'/ simply to avoid
"passive voice."  /-lu'/ isn't really "passive"; it is explicitly telling
you that the subject is unstated.

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