tlhIngan-Hol Archive: Sun Jan 04 20:05:46 1998
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Re: Was KLBC: 2 suffix Type 9 in a whole sentence
- From: "William H. Martin" <[email protected]>
- Subject: Re: Was KLBC: 2 suffix Type 9 in a whole sentence
- Date: Sun, 4 Jan 1998 23:04:18 -0500 (Eastern Standard Time)
- Priority: NORMAL
On Sat, 3 Jan 1998 00:32:13 -0800 (PST) David Trimboli
<[email protected]> wrote:
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Qov <[email protected]>
> To: Multiple recipients of list <[email protected]>
> Date: Friday, January 02, 1998 12:46 PM
> Subject: Re: Was KLBC: 2 suffix Type 9 in a whole sentence
>
>
> >At 05:29 98-01-01 -0800, charghwI' wrote:
> >}rojmeH Qu'vaD lIghommeH yejquv Qang lengtaHvIS 'ej pagh
> >}buQtaHvIS HIvlu'mo' Hegh yejquv Qang.
> >}(wej wo' tu'lu'pu'bogh)
> >
> >Fair enough. It can be done in one sentence. I like breaking it up into
> >multiple sentences, because the kicker is "the Qang is dead." I felt it
> >changed the impact of the statement to give the explanation after the
> >highlight.
>
> I agree. The sentence should be recrafted to match the style and emphasis
> used in the English version. Your "kicker" is right, and then the
> ambassador goes on to list the points which give the kicker its strength.
> While technically correct, I would be confused upon hearing the sentence
> above. I don't see how to list the points effectively according to Klingon
> grammar, while keeping it all in one sentence. I can imagine the Klingon
> ambassador holding up his hand and counting each point on his fingers.
>
> My go:
>
> Heghpu' yejquv Qang! HIvlu'pu' 'e' bajbe'!
Wouldn't {qotlh} be a better verb choice than {baj}?
> tlhIH lIghommeH lenglI'!
> rojHom maqta'! roj chavtaH 'e' nID!
> The Chancellor of the High Council has died! The attack upon him had not
> been earned! He was traveling in order to meet *you*! He had declared a
> truce! He was trying to achieve peace!
>
> (I rather like the "transition" of {rojHom} to {roj} here. He'd declared a
> {rojHom}, and was trying to make it a {roj}.)
>
> SuStel
> Stardate 98007.4
Otherwise, I think you did a fine job of it. I like it both
ways. The trial is an artificial environment and I doubt normal
speech patterns are adhered to un that place.
charghwI'