RE: RE: KLBC vaj bom

["Andeen, Eric" <Eric.Andeen@Sequencia.com>]

jatlh QoreQ:

> Well here is the revised version of "vaj bom"....

> tlhIngan jIH.
> jISuvchu' jIH.
> jIHoS 'ej jIHem.
> quv vISoqmeH jIQojchu'.

This is probably fine, but I don't know if honor is something that can be
gained. I would have probably used <jIquv'eghmoHmeH> here instead. Just
something to think about.

> jISuvtaHvIS jIHeghchugh vaj,
> pop'a' vIQapchu'.

<Qap> is "succeed", and I am pretty sure it can't take an object. You're
looking for <chav> - "achieve".


> quvmo' jach 'IwwIj
> 'ej gholwI' 'Iwmo' jach 'etlhwIj.
> vIje' 'e' mutlhob
> vaj jIHeQnIS.
> batlh jIvang 'e' mughojmoH.

If you're trying to say "It teaches me to act honorably" here, you've fallen
into a common mistake for English speakers. What you have said is "It
teaches me *that* I act honorably". This is probably not what you want. Try
<batlh jIvangmeH mughojmoH> instead.

> Qu'mo' jIyIn.
> Huv ngoQwIj.
> ghol'a'wI' vIjeylaHchu'meH murach toDujwIj;
> ghIqtal!!

maj.

> tlhIngan maH.
> maSuvchu' maH.
> maHoS 'ej maHem.
> quv wISoqmeH maQojchu'.
> maSuvtaHvIS maHeghchugh vaj,
> pop'a' wIQapchu'.

Same comments on this paragraph as the first.

Nicely done overall.

>>>>>
--=< Translation >=--

Warrior Song

I am Klingon.
I am a Warrior.
Strong and proud am I.
I wage war for honour.
If I should die in battle, then
I win the ultimate reward.

My blood cries out for honour
And my blade cries out for my enemy's blood.
It pleads to me to feed it,
So I must comply.
They will teach me to act honourably.

I live for duty.
My purpose is clear.
My courage strengthens me
So that I can defeat my greatest opponents;
To the death!!

We are Klingon.
We are Warriors.
Strong and proud are we.
We wage war for honour.
If we should die in battle, then
We win the ultimate reward.
>>>>>


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