tlhIngan-Hol Archive: Tue Dec 17 21:38:38 1996
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RE: KLBC: story, part 6
- From: [email protected] (Alan Anderson)
- Subject: RE: KLBC: story, part 6
- Date: Wed, 18 Dec 1996 00:39:08 -0500
ja' SuStel:
>> DuSaQDaq Suba' 'e' chaw' neH.
>Who permits this? I think you should go with
>DuSaQDaq Suba' net chaw' neH.
With {neH} following {chaw'}, it seems to imply that the only thing
being done is that permission is given for them to sit in the school.
I would simplify this to {DuSaQDaq neH Suba'} "you will sit only in
the school."
>> nIvwI'pu'vaD SujatlhtaHvIS, reH {neS} bolo'.
>Daj.
I think {moch} would be a much better word than {nIvwI'}.
>> "chippu'DI' jIbraj, vaj HIpmeyraj luchraj je tIHev. DaH, ghomHa'," jachqu'
>> la''a'.
>I don't think the {vaj} works here. At least, it's weird.
It doesn't look right to me, either. Neither does this use of {chIp};
it means "cut, trim", but it looks like you want it to mean "be cut."
>...One wonders why Klingon cadets would be required to cut their hair.
In human military academies, it is common practice to demean cadets.
They have no need for courage, only obedience.
>> boQvaD jatlh ghaH, "ramvam pe'loravaD bIj."
>Hmmm . . . I think this would be better expressed with {ramvam pe'lora yIbIj}.
I don't have any trouble with the clipped "punishment for Pelora tonight"
phrasing, but the word {ramvam} doesn't sit right with me. It's probably
okay, but it sounds weird.
-- ghunchu'wI'