tlhIngan-Hol Archive: Tue May 27 20:32:22 2014
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Re: [Tlhingan-hol] Vows
On Tue, May 27, 2014 at 2:20 PM, Elizabeth Lawrence
<[email protected]> wrote:
> I'm working on some Klingon wedding vows, and I'd like a second opinion.
>
> DaHjaj qanay
> DaHjaj qaSaw
cha' mu'tlheghmeyvam pIm jatlh cha' nuv pIm 'e' vIpIH. This had better
be two different people talking. :-)
> jIyIntaHvIS bangwI’ SoHtaH
> reH qatlhej ‘e’ vI’Ip
> reH SoHvaD jISuv ‘e’ vI’Ip
Would {ghob} work instead of {Suv}? I'm not sure that you want to go
overboard on the Klingon-esque sentiment.
> reH juHwIj’e’ juHlIj ‘oH ‘e’ vI’Ip
If you're going to "front" the subject as a topic noun, it should
precede the adverbial as well. However, I think you probably should go
with standard word order: {reH juHlIj 'oH juHwIj'e'...}
> pIj maHaghmeH jIvum 'e' vI'Ip
I see what you mean about the phrasing here. If you really want the
{...'e' vI'Ip}, I'm having a hard time coming up with anything better.
How about {reH maHaghlaH 'e' vIpotlhmoH 'e' vI'Ip}?
> reH maQaHchuq ‘e’ ma’Ip
Why the sudden change to plural?
> DaHjaj qorDu' chu' wIchenmoH
Consider {wIcher} instead of {wIchenmoH}, though I can understand why
you might prefer {chenmoH}.
> Also, I'm not sure I like the mixture of first and second person, but I'm
> not sure how to rephrase.
You mean the {bangwI' SoHtaH}? I didn't notice anything odd about it.
-- ghunchu'wI'
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