tlhIngan-Hol Archive: Sun Jun 24 17:08:44 2012
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Re: [Tlhingan-hol] A New Hope
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I think most of it is very good. I have one largish gripe, one medium
one, and one small one:
> ret nI', qIb Hopqu'Daq...
{ret nI'} sounds very wrong to me, though I understand how it could be
argued to be correct. I'd prefer {poH nI' ret} or even {bov nI' ret},
though those too seem to abuse {ret} slightly.
> wo' nuH'a' De' pegh nIH lotlhwI' ghoqwI'pu'.
Given the timing of events and the use of "managed to steal" in the
English version, I think {nIHta'} is preferable to a simple {nIH}.
> Hegh Hov 'oH nuH'a' pong.
{Hegh} starts out in my mind as a verb with {Hov} as its subject, and
then I have to backtrack and reinterpret it properly. That's just an
observation, not really a complaint. The true problem is the lack of
{-'e'} on {pong}.
-- ghunchu'wI'
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