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Re: [Tlhingan-hol] 'oghwI' lut

Robyn Stewart ([email protected]) [KLI Member] [Hol po'wI']



I hope you haven't given up. Please please please don't feel overwhelmed by my saga. I just can't stop writing, and you know I've been studying Klingon for about twenty-four years. I do think writing stories is an excellent way to develop your Klingon.

* Don't feel persecuted by nitpicking of the grammar. It's the only way this list has ever learned to do things: correct to perfection, and as we don't actually know what perfection is, arguments break out.

* Don't worry about making mistakes. I'm proud to have made more mistakes in the last 120 days than the rest of the list put together.

* Don't think your story is inferior. Mine is rambling, unpaced, dizzyingly varying in tone--ranging from technical discussions, to romance, to puke jokes to non-consensual sexual violence -- and I didn't know what the ending was to be until about halfway through the story. I'm currently writing from an outline that covers about twenty chapters with the phrase "general wackiness ensues".

Send more!

My story is now getting a bit too involved to have you write part of it, but I can still make yours part of mine by having one of your characters show up for a cameo and tell a story. I posted 119 today. I have good places to drop a story in around 135 and 171. Or just tell me something about one of your characters and I'll put him/her in the story with a footnote referring to your story. I love shared universes and I'm not picky if your ship/physics/command structure doesn't match mine.

- Qov

At 06:35 12/09/2011, you wrote:
This is the first part of my first story in tlhIngan Hol. I have been studying SuvwI' Hol for all of two months, so I ask for your patience. Please give me feedback and let me know anything that needs correcting. I don't really intend to make this story too long, and I am already too interested in Qov's ongoing saga to flood this list with another (much more inferior) story. Here are some words/proper names that I think should be introduced up front. I suck at making up Klingon names so I nicked these:

Qel - Krell, the captain of the I.K.S. Devisor ( toQDuj 'oghwI')

HuS - Huss, Krell's tactical officer AND head of security (that get's important later...)

torgh - Torg, helmsman

orayangan - Orion. I saw this term on the KLI's Extended Corpus page. I hate to use it, but this story is set during a time when the Organian Peace Treaty is in effect. The Klingon privateers in my story (like Krell) are either paying Orion pirates to attack colonies or are faking Orion raids. 'orghengan rojHom mIch - Organian Treaty Zone. I am certain someone else has come up with a much better name, but I couldn't find it. This is the zone the Organians set up in "Errand of Mercy". Since open warfare is prohibited in this zone, the Klingons have had to rely on more devious ways to curtail Federation influence.

So here goes nothing!

--jhb

'ay' wa'

toQDuj 'oghwI' ra' Qel HoD. 'orghengan rojHom mIch ngIv 'oghwI'. <<HoD>>, ja' HuS ya, <<SuyDujHey vIHotlh! <<SuyDuj? nuq luHIj SuyDujvam?>> jang Qel. <<vIHotlhtaH, qaH>> jang HuS. <<HoD, loSpev luHIjlaw'!>> ja' HuS. <<nuq 'oH ghochHeychaj'e'?>> jatlh Qel. <<mIchvamDaq yuQ DoQbe'bogh lughoStaH>> jang HuS. <<maj!>> jatlh Qel. <<SuyDujvetlh wIweH! DeghwI', He chu' yIghoS! SuyDuj yItlha'!>> ra' Qel. <<lu', qaH>> jang torgh DeghwI'. <<pIvlob vagh! yIchu'!>> ra' Qel. <<HuS, pa'wIjDaq jIjaH! HItlhej!>> ra' Qel. <<luq qaH!>> jang HuS.

HoD pa' 'el Qel HuS je. <<HuS, De' pegh vIghaj. qavoqlaH'a'?>> <<HoD! jIjatlhpa' jatlh Hovmey!>> jang HuS. mon Qel. <<maj>> jatlh Qel. <<loSpev vIneHbe'ba', HuS. reH tlhIngan wo' vItoy' vIneH. batlh vIneH! SuyDuj wIHIv 'ach *orayangan* weHwI'pu' marur'eghmoH. 'orghengan rojHom mIch nganpu' luQanQo' yuQjIjDIvI'. boQvaD tlhIngan wo' luqoy'choHbej mIchvam nganpu'. yuQjIjDIvI' lumovQo' 'ej tugh mIchvam che'bej tlhIngan wo'!>> jatlh Qel. <<'ach not weHvam lunaDbejbe' tlhIngan ra'ghomquv, vaj nabwIj yIjatlhQo'!>> ra' Qel. <<lu' qaH! Qapla', HoD!>> jatlh HuS.

'ay' cha'

<<QuS martaq la''a' 'e' vISov. muHoH neH martaq. matlhqu' martaq QaS. tugh martaq vIHoHnIS. choQutlh'a'? choQaHqang'a'? <<HISlaH qaH!>> jang HuS. <<maj, HuS. martaq 'uQDajDaq DalannIS. DaH taD QaSDaj, 'ach tugh Qu'vamvaD taDHa'moH martaq>> <<jIyajqu', HoD! wa'leS Heghbej martaq la'a'! Qapla' qaH!>> jatlh HuS. <<Qapla'!>> jang Qel.


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