tlhIngan-Hol Archive: Thu Jul 10 21:43:41 1997
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Re: lutHomwIj
- From: "William Cody" <[email protected]>
- Subject: Re: lutHomwIj
- Date: Thu, 10 Jul 1997 23:43:36 -0500
>Qo'noSDaq ram tam. ngemDaq yIt Human mob. nagh tu'. naghDaq ba'. nujDaq
>tlhIchjan lan 'ej 'oH meQ. lotlhwI' ghaH. maSDaq wov legh. ngemvo' yIt
>tlhIngan SuvwI'. ghaH legh Human. <nuqneH> jatlh. jang SuvwI' <jIwamtaH
>'ej pagh vIneH>. <SoH 'Iv> jatlh SuvwI'. <lotlhwI' jIH 'ej 'avwI'pu'vo'
>vIqettaH> jatlh Human. <jISov> jatlh SuvwI'. Hagh ghaH. tlhIchjanlIj
>chagh Human. naghvo' Sup ghaH 'ej qet ghaH. HumanDaq Sup SuvwI'. Human
>DuQ SuvwI'. jach Human 'ej Hegh ghaH. Qam SuvwI' 'ej <Qapla'> jatlh.
><maj HoHvetlh> jatlh 'ej ngemDaq ngab tlhIngan SuvwI'.
I got:
It is quiet on QonoS. A lone Human walks in the forest. (He/She) finds a
rock. (He/She) sits on the rock. (He/She) places a cigerette in (his/her)
mouth and it burns. (He/She) is a rebel. (He/She) sees the moons
brightness. The Klingon warrior walks from the forest. The Human sees
(him/her). (He/She) says,"What do you want?" "I'm hunting and I want
nothing" the warrior replies. (He/She) laughs. The Human drops (his/her)
cigerette. (He/She) jumps from the rock and (he/she) runs. The warrior
jumps at the Human. The warrior stabs the Human. The Human cries out and
(he/she) dies. The warrior stands and says,"Success!!" (He/She)
says,"That kill was good" and the Klingon warrior disappears into the
forest.
You should have had at the beggining: "ngemDaq yIt Human loD/be' mob" A
lone Human male/female walks in the forest". This would have left no
confusion over male/female. Also,"maSDaq wov legh" I think is a little
confusing. I would add,"maSDaq wov legh ghoH" to make it,"(He/She) sees
the moon's brightness". All in all, very good.
<*Cody* jatlh "Qapla 'ej qengtaH".> Cody says,"Success and carry on"